Self-Editing and using Success Criteria

In Room 15 we have been focussing on self-editing. This means we have been resourceful learners by using editing cards, alphabet word cards and editing pencils to check our work. We also have success criteria glued into our writing books (like a check list) to help us remember what we need to check off in our writing. Have we re-read our writing 3 times (does it make sense?), have we checked for capital letters, full stops and correct spelling of words.

WALT: write sensory poems

WALT: write sensory poems
Success Criteria: I can

• say what I see, hear, smell, feel and taste
• use descriptive words
• describe a setting

The Beach

I see the shiny shells

I hear waves crashing

I smell dog poo

I feel the hot sand on my feet

I taste fish and chips

Written by Daisy-Kate

The Beach

I see the golden sparkly sand going through my hand

I hear people talking together by the beautiful sand

I smell dead rotten fish

I feel very hairy dogs at the beach

I taste fish and salty chips.

Written by Lila

The Beach

I see the blue water splashing onto the golden sand

I hear the yellow and pink crabs snapping at each other

I smell dead fish

I feel the water lapping against my leg

I taste yummy hot fish and chips

Written by Flynn

The Beach

I see waves crashing 

I hear dogs barking

I smell fresh salt

I feel cold water

I taste icecream

Written by Ethan

WALT: Write expressively - Term 1

WALT: write expressively 

I know I am successful when....I can

• use adjectives, adverbs, onomatopoeia, personification, similes and metaphors.
• use my senses to help me describe
• use present tense
• write poetry

Recount writing - Swimming

Recount writing shared from Room 15

On Monday, Thursday and Friday we go swimming in the Clevedon School Pool. We change into our togs in the class. Then we walk altogether to the pool. Sometimes people don’t bring their togs. When we get in we twist half way, then we put our feet in. Then we hold the bar and we kick and blow bubbles in the water.  Written by Stevie Selby Room 15

On Monday, Thursday and Friday we go swimming in the Clevedon School pool. We play and swim, we do freestyle, backstroke and breastroke. We swim widths and lengths sometimes, but mostly widths. I play tag when I am in the pool. I can do three strokes and then take a breath, this is when I am swimming freestyle. I don’t need goggles for the pool because I can swim with my eyes open under the water. I am really good at all these strokes. I can also swim really fast.

Written by Johnny Bretherton Room 15

Welcome back to 2016 - Term 1!

Welcome back to 2016 - Term 1! 

Watch this space to read some of our amazing pieces of writing.....

Term 4 Writing WALT: procedural texts

We are learning to......

Write procedural/instructional texts:

Success Criteria:

I can.....

• write procedures (‘to provide instructions on how to make or do something’)

• Title Goal (What is going to be made or done)
• Materials (What is needed)
• Steps (How will it be made or done)

Example:

Sharing our Information Reports on Natural Disasters - Term 3

Last term we wrote information reports on a chosen Natural Disaster. We visited Room 6 in the senior school to share our writing. Here are some photos of us sharing our booklets that we worked so hard on. Needless to say they were very impressed with our factual booklets, photographs and diagrams.